some lyrics. Please criteque, its the only way to get better

Switchfootfan77

Here is just a little part of a song that I like really like to sing. I wrote it when I had the greatest time of my life with this one girl. We did everything together, but it wasn't so that we were the only people in the world. We were with each, but also had seperate lifes. And this is to Karissa. It is intended to be a christina guitar song. THANKS!

There is a time which everyone is together
but the memories fade
and all is lost in the caotic time
so be here with me
so we can remember together
all the times that we spent
and maybe it will last forever

come be with me
and we will spend the whole night
laughing together and maybe you will see
this love that is in my heart
wishes it will never be apart
and all i want to do
is to spend everyday with you
:FADED:

Its just alittle snip, I will type the whole thing later. Tell me what you think.
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Switchfootfan77 · Posted: Thu Feb 12, 2004 5:49 am Post subject:

Here's another little snip, and its not really edited at all. My band just kinda came up with it. It is pretty kewl! Enjoy! Very Happy

mATT

Four hole years of high school fun
Mommy watches her little baby grow up and move on
The memories come and go on their way
How long will the high school memories stay

Two years down and a few to go
Some friends stay yet some move on
The old memories start to fade slowly away
I wonder if I will ever remember them again